Alone in space, a drifter confronts memory, love, and loss through questions—seeking not escape, but a reason to exist again in the silence between stars.
In Singapore, the poem is considered to be of a secondary 2/3 level. This is a really good and deep poem, but we might have less thoughts and more shallow responses coming in from anyone below a secondary 2/3 level in Singapore standards
The poem fills me with complex emotions, even though I do not completely understand the poem. I could still sense the deep emotions spiralling in this mystical poem.
I really like how we can connect this poem in ways we like ourselves. I thought about the fact that you don't have to relate this in a physical manner, like you are actually stuck in a situation like this but I think it's better off thought in a space where you are mentally tired or broken apart. It's also evident that this is a bit generic based on the common centralized thought of "you".. however, this is better than other works based on the character or thought "you" and it really hits hard as Wybie tries to make it so we can relate the person somehow rather than other similar works which offer no real "connection" or understanding with you.
This was a very brilliant poem written by Wybie as it just like a lake.See it from the outside, you won’t understand it but go deep through it, it’s beauty will hit hard
Wybie’s story isn’t just about space—it’s about the heart. Wrapped in the language of stars and silence is something deeply familiar: the ache of missing someone, the fear of being forgotten, the quiet hope that love still lingers somewhere out there. This isn't just science fiction. It’s the story of anyone who’s ever felt lost in their own life, drifting between memories and moments, trying to make sense of where they belong.
The journey doesn’t move in a straight line—it loops, spirals, pauses. Just like healing. Loneliness gives way to flashes of connection, only to fade again into uncertainty. And through it all, something keeps going. A quiet pulse. A feeling that even in the emptiest places, something inside us keeps searching, keeps feeling, keeps hoping.
This isn’t a story about having the answers. It’s a reminder that the right questions—the ones that move us, haunt us, shape us—are sometimes all we need to begin finding our way home.
We missed Wybie during today's session. ELF001’s preparation was clearly inadequate — the handover was sloppy and poorly executed. MIHF must enforce stronger accountability standards immediately. That said, I also recognize that I did not deliver at the level expected as a speaker. When I opened the floor to Emma and Richard, they quickly dismissed the opportunity for questions, which signals that I failed to engage them effectively. I should have structured the interaction more creatively — perhaps turning it into a game or weaving the content into a more compelling narrative, something that would spark curiosity, like a Detective Conan story. I accept full responsibility for the lack of energy in the room. I will be raising my standards and ensuring a much stronger performance in the next session - and ensure that enough preparation goes into the story telling. But i hope we can get Emma and Richard to present their challenges.
Wybie, thank you for your efforts on the recent TLS Challenge submission. Overall, your work shows strong initiative and timeliness, and it's clear you've put thought into both the visual presentation and the story. That said, I’d like to highlight a few areas that require attention and refinement.
First, several updates are needed in the presentation slides. The file naming convention should follow the standard format: YY.MM.DD TLS CHALLENGE, which was missing in the current version. Additionally, the logo was absent in multiple slides—please ensure it is consistently included moving forward. I also noticed your name was not listed; I’ve gone ahead and added it this time, but be sure to include it in future versions. On Slide 1, the date was incorrect—it should be April 26, not April 19.
Turning to the story element of the presentation: it is incredibly well-written and imaginative. Your creativity shines through, and the depth of the narrative is commendable. However, the complexity and emotional tone may be challenging for some audience members to fully grasp. With that in mind, I’ve looped in SAHN and MIHF to provide additional perspectives. Specifically, I would like MIHF to prepare an alternative set of less emotionally-driven, more objective questions to support the review process of Chapter 15 - just incase needed. After review with SAHN - he shared this was alright to proceed. Apart from a pinch of melancholy, I do think this is good stuff. Let's talk soon on the progress.
Lastly, I want to acknowledge that your submission was delivered on time and in full, which is appreciated. Consistency in meeting deadlines is crucial, and you’ve done well here. You will need to take the audience through a deeper level - slowly but steadily - crack some jokes as well - Go cool! loosen a bit. Laugh more. It will help the others to connect better.
Thank you again for your hard work. With a few adjustments, this will be a strong and effective submission.
In Singapore, the poem is considered to be of a secondary 2/3 level. This is a really good and deep poem, but we might have less thoughts and more shallow responses coming in from anyone below a secondary 2/3 level in Singapore standards
I think I don't fully understand the story but I also feel like I get some emotions maybe from the story.
The poem fills me with complex emotions, even though I do not completely understand the poem. I could still sense the deep emotions spiralling in this mystical poem.
Beautiful poem:)
I really like how we can connect this poem in ways we like ourselves. I thought about the fact that you don't have to relate this in a physical manner, like you are actually stuck in a situation like this but I think it's better off thought in a space where you are mentally tired or broken apart. It's also evident that this is a bit generic based on the common centralized thought of "you".. however, this is better than other works based on the character or thought "you" and it really hits hard as Wybie tries to make it so we can relate the person somehow rather than other similar works which offer no real "connection" or understanding with you.
The poetic expression is good.
Please detail out what is good and what part needs to improve. A comment for the sake of a comment is not effective.
This was a very brilliant poem written by Wybie as it just like a lake.See it from the outside, you won’t understand it but go deep through it, it’s beauty will hit hard
Provide what you have learned from this.
Wybie’s story isn’t just about space—it’s about the heart. Wrapped in the language of stars and silence is something deeply familiar: the ache of missing someone, the fear of being forgotten, the quiet hope that love still lingers somewhere out there. This isn't just science fiction. It’s the story of anyone who’s ever felt lost in their own life, drifting between memories and moments, trying to make sense of where they belong.
The journey doesn’t move in a straight line—it loops, spirals, pauses. Just like healing. Loneliness gives way to flashes of connection, only to fade again into uncertainty. And through it all, something keeps going. A quiet pulse. A feeling that even in the emptiest places, something inside us keeps searching, keeps feeling, keeps hoping.
This isn’t a story about having the answers. It’s a reminder that the right questions—the ones that move us, haunt us, shape us—are sometimes all we need to begin finding our way home.
We missed Wybie during today's session. ELF001’s preparation was clearly inadequate — the handover was sloppy and poorly executed. MIHF must enforce stronger accountability standards immediately. That said, I also recognize that I did not deliver at the level expected as a speaker. When I opened the floor to Emma and Richard, they quickly dismissed the opportunity for questions, which signals that I failed to engage them effectively. I should have structured the interaction more creatively — perhaps turning it into a game or weaving the content into a more compelling narrative, something that would spark curiosity, like a Detective Conan story. I accept full responsibility for the lack of energy in the room. I will be raising my standards and ensuring a much stronger performance in the next session - and ensure that enough preparation goes into the story telling. But i hope we can get Emma and Richard to present their challenges.
Wybie, thank you for your efforts on the recent TLS Challenge submission. Overall, your work shows strong initiative and timeliness, and it's clear you've put thought into both the visual presentation and the story. That said, I’d like to highlight a few areas that require attention and refinement.
First, several updates are needed in the presentation slides. The file naming convention should follow the standard format: YY.MM.DD TLS CHALLENGE, which was missing in the current version. Additionally, the logo was absent in multiple slides—please ensure it is consistently included moving forward. I also noticed your name was not listed; I’ve gone ahead and added it this time, but be sure to include it in future versions. On Slide 1, the date was incorrect—it should be April 26, not April 19.
Turning to the story element of the presentation: it is incredibly well-written and imaginative. Your creativity shines through, and the depth of the narrative is commendable. However, the complexity and emotional tone may be challenging for some audience members to fully grasp. With that in mind, I’ve looped in SAHN and MIHF to provide additional perspectives. Specifically, I would like MIHF to prepare an alternative set of less emotionally-driven, more objective questions to support the review process of Chapter 15 - just incase needed. After review with SAHN - he shared this was alright to proceed. Apart from a pinch of melancholy, I do think this is good stuff. Let's talk soon on the progress.
Lastly, I want to acknowledge that your submission was delivered on time and in full, which is appreciated. Consistency in meeting deadlines is crucial, and you’ve done well here. You will need to take the audience through a deeper level - slowly but steadily - crack some jokes as well - Go cool! loosen a bit. Laugh more. It will help the others to connect better.
Thank you again for your hard work. With a few adjustments, this will be a strong and effective submission.